| Component | Inspector | Date | Status | Remarks |
|---|---|---|---|---|
| 2.4 | KMJ | 22oct04 | FIX | Title too long? |
| 2.4P1 | KMJ | 22oct04 | FIX | Try to simplify this a bit. |
| 2.4P2 | KMJ | 22oct04 | FIX | Could this be explain better or does it even need to be here? I don't know. |
| 2.4I1 | KMJ | 22oct04 | FIX | Introduce this first. How did we get here? Where is here? |
| 2.4P3 | KMJ | 22oct04 | DONE | |
| 2.4P4 | KMJ | 22oct04 | DONE | First sentence is confusing. Put the exception at the end. Simplify this sentence. You don't explain enough for the reader to know what this is. |
| 2.4A1 | KMJ | 22oct04 | ? | |
| 2.4.1 | KMJ | 22oct04 | DONE | |
| 2.4.1P1 | KMJ | 22oct04 | FIX | Sentence 1 too long. Break it up and provide a transition into the 2nd sentence. |
| 2.4.1I1 | KMJ | FIX | Trim bottom of image. | |
| 2.4.1P2 | KMJ | 22oct04 | FIX | Elaborate where you get this |
| 2.4.1I2 | KMJ | 22oct04 | DONE | |
| 2.4.1P3 | KMJ | 22oct04 | FIX | Too verbose (too wordy). Simplify. The goal is for everyone to understand you. |
| 2.4.1P4 | KMJ | 22oct04 | Fix | The sentence leading into the list doesn't work. It needs to be revised. Also the list should follow the same style for each point. The middle sentence needs to start with a verb like the 1st and 3rd. |
| 2.4.1P5 | KMJ | 22oct04 | Fix | I can't understand what you are referring too. You don't need to sound like an English major; you just need to be clear. |
| 2.4.1P6 | KMJ | 22oct04 | FIX | Break this up. Simplify your sentences. |
| 2.4.1P7 | KMJ | 22oct04 | FIX | This info should be after figure 2. |
| 2.4.1I3 | KMJ | 22oct04 | FIX | More description in the caption |
| 2.4.1P8 | KMJ | 22oct04 | FIX | Sentences too long, too wordy. Again, break it up. I need bite sized pieces. What is a spinbox widget? |
| 2.4.1P9 | KMJ | 22oct04 | FIX | Revise sentence introducing the list. The list is not gramatically correct. You'll have to look up the correct way to do this. |
| 2.4A2 | KMJ | 22oct04 | ? | |
| 2.4.2 | KMJ | 22oct04 | DONE | |
| 2.4.2P1 | KMJ | 22oct04 | DONE - Except | You need figure with this. |
| 2.4A3 | KMJ | 22oct04 | ? | |
| 2.4.3 | KMJ | 22oct04 | DONE | |
| 2.4.3P1 | KMJ | 22oct04 | FIX | Need to complete this section. Revise sentences, break up, simplify. |
| 2.4A4 | KMJ | 22oct04 | ? | |
| 2.4.4 | KMJ | 22oct04 | DONE | |
| 2.4.4P1 | KMJ | 22oct04 | DONE | |
| Out of time. This biggest problem you seem to have is trying to use bigger words and phrases than you need. Again I say... simplify and break it up. | ||||